I’ve emailed Mr Alex my storyline and he was very kind to help me read through. He then gave me feedback on what he felt about my storyline…
He commented that he likes the premise alot and that it’s very suitable for children’s book. He felt that it’s simple and visually attractive with a nice moral. However, he felt that the storyline may be wordy for my target audience (age 3-6, preschool) and the usage of words like “Magnificent, thunderous applause” may not be understandable for my target audience.
Therefore, I’ve decided that I need to simplify my storyline.
For the interaction of the book, I’ve decided that these interactions will not appear in every page of the book because it might be too overloading. So I’ve to decide carefully where I could put these interactions in.
